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I've got chapter 1 of my new book, Leigh , out on the internet. I'm trying to generate a following of the book by publishing it chapter by chapter at first like Dickens and many other authors used to do. Then I'll publish it in its entirety.

Lisa edited this first chapter. This is the book I mentioned in the other post about first person. I started it in first person but switched to third. I was afraid people would see me in the book and not the character. Lisa pointed out that this book would be much better in first. I rewrote it and it was much better.

I would appreciate any comments on it.

Hi Rebecca:

I promise I will read this first chapter as soon as my boss leaves for the day(lol).

At the moment, Sylvester and myself do not have internet at home due to finances. I do office work for my "freelance" boss in exchange for using his internet - of course you know how that sometimes works out = when he is here, it is totally about his work.

Anyway, I am making a note (senior moments girl/forget stuff) - to stop by before I leave today at 4pm EST to give you my feedback.

How EXCITING - way to go!!!!

Hugs,
A

Thank you. I am so excited.

You are very welcome

Hi Rebecca I'll read it too. I have some stuff to do today, but tonight when I have my "me" time, I'll read it. And I'm looking forward to it

And I like the idea of publishing one chapter at a time.

I've been toying with the idea of tweeting my book.

Hi Rebecca:

I left a comment on your site to let you know I would be posting here.

I love the idea of changing careers and how you went into it causing a hardship - a fact that can be true, but can be overcome.

The mother in law Abigail, bless her heart, is so domineering and mean. And Mark, the son, just lets her disrespect his wife.

Yes, so many women, are in empty marriages like this one feeling the same emotions and not getting the support they need and deserve.

Okay, let me know when Chapter 2 is up.

Hugs,
A

I will do that, Angela. It's being edited now. I was hoping many women would connect to at least portion of the story. My husband says that every mother and mother-in-law could be found in Abigail and every husband has some aspect of Mark in them.

Thank you, again.

Hi Rebecca:

Believe me girl, I can totally relate.

For the brief time I was married at age 21, I could tell you stories of climbing out the bedroom window when SHE came to visit(lol).

Needless to say, I ended up divorcing him before 1 year of marriage. Now living with a fantastic guy for a year now. But still on my "guard" as folks can hurt and disrespect you if you let them.

I am so happy I have grown SECURE in myself and live MY life the way that makes my INSIDES feel ever so good!!!

Hugs,
A

Hi Rebecca

I really enjoyed your first chapter. I feel SOOOOO sorry for that woman!

My first fiance's mom was that evil Abigail LOL!! Except she smelled musty, where Abigail seems more refined - like she wouldn't DARE to smell musty LOL!

I bet there are so many women who are going to be saying something like that as they read the first chapter - they know the feeling.

Though I didn't read it in third person, I will definitely say I liked it in first person.

The only part I got confused on was where Leigh turned to walk toward home --- then she walked to her car that was parked a few blocks away (giving her time to decompress). I had to re-read it a couple of times to figure it out.

I thought the way you talked about Leigh seeing her own reflection, and wondering where the sparkle in her eyes had gone, was so powerful!

I've gone through periods like that - I didn't recognize that poor woman in the mirror who looked like she'd had it so tough.

I can't wait to read the next chapter. I know she has to be planning something!