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#399221 03/27/08 12:15 PM
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Rhapsody in B Minor
[No, wait that�s]

RapCity, Minor, B

Boy in baggy blues,
Boombox hanging and
banging against his leg.
Baseball cap not backwards
but bendified - oblique.
T-shirt a billowy billboard
for some band not yet bygone.
Way too cool to
bop to the beat,
his stroll
is a Jack tar roll
with nothing to do with rock and.
His hip-hop rap ripples
with repetitive rhymes -
Boastful bluster in
alternative alliteration.
Boosted bass blasts,
blowing away
bird songs,
bothering blue-hairs
by the bus stop,
bringing bad-blood
and back-at-ya barks
between the boy and
black leather bystanders
but
it can't do nothing
to banish
that ol' boogie woogie
barreling eight to the bar
'round my soul.

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FrankJBN #405253 04/10/08 04:13 PM
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Clever, this. And quite a nice example of alliteration, Frank.

I quite like 'bendified' and the rhythmic meter you employed throughout the piece. Definitely consider submitting to Mused!

Lis


Lisbeth Cheever


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