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Hola Elizabeth. Bien venidos.

I have never seen a diamond poem before - cute. I'm not the proofreader but I think your poem is very nice. Angeles will have to come by and proofread it.


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Hola Angie. Oh Really? My mom hasn't either. It's not really in the diamond shape, but it will be. haha :] Oh ok, Thank you :]

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�Hola Elizabeth!

So interesing! .-)

Ok, let's see:

Me llamo Elizabeth.
No soy ni mand�n ni bajo. Here, I guess you should use the feminine for "mand�n" and "bajo", so it will be: "No soy ni mandona ni baja"
Soy morena, atl�tica, c�mica.
Todos los dias (d�as) yo (remember you can ommit the personal pronoun, and I think it looks great if you just say "uso la computadora, etc..." instead of "yo uso...") uso la computadora, hacer la tarea oops! What about "hago la tarea"? (you need to conjugate this verb ;-), como, hablo por tel�fono.
En (el) verano mis amigos y yo jugamos al (it is always "jugar a + the game/sport")tenis, tiendamos This verb does not exist! Use instead "ir de compras". In this case "vamos de compras", risamos it is: nos reimos.
Nunca nado ni bailo.
�Asi As� soy yo!


So, finally, it will be like this:

Me llamo Elizabeth.
No soy ni ni mandona ni baja.
Soy morena, atl�tica, c�mica.
Todos los d�as uso la computadora, hago la tarea, como, hablo por tel�fono.
En verano mis amigos y yo jugamos al tenis, vamos de compras, nos reimos.
Nunca nado ni bailo.
�As� soy yo!


Hope this helps, Elizabeth! And...

remember it is very important that you understand the reason for any change I made. In case you don't, please ask me. It will be a pleasure to help you!

Last edited by Angeles F. - Spanish language Host; 09/12/09 05:55 PM.

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